Lifeline Extended

Hey:
This piece, as you would know from previous commenters has a depth of quality within the story of images. Side angle shots to the building with the truck driving by on the left side provides an attention to detail that reveals the depth of your investment into the piece! Well done. You're shots of the cross, the streetlight which is all wrapped into a sunset adds depth. Excellent. As Joelhindojsa mentioned, the only reason to share possible thoughts on change is to advance or better the piece on from ones' opinion, and mine would only be to somehow ease more with the exchange of conversation between the two men outside on the back deck. Perhaps shift a bit of the lead up to the actual conversation, perhaps, quicker. Maybe that's a location that you could tighten up the time on the piece to bring it down to meet Slamdance requirements.
I like the silence within the images of your shots. It adds an element of reflection that I think reveals quality. Excellent piece. Well done and I see such a future within your work and this piece.
Keep speaking for those who cannot ! Incredible. This gets my vote and if shortened, I would hope to see this on Current.
Danielmklopp

Great work Brett! Just all around awesome work. I would love to see this air on Current.

I like your piece I think it has a lot going for it. The sound quality is really nice, and the cinematography is beautiful, especially the B-Roll of the city. I would make the suggestion of flipping one or two shots from the first batch interviews we see, and I only say that because the people are all justified to the right, and as the first interviews we see it makes the piece look a little sloppy, when the doc as a whole isn't.

I think it might be nice to place some music in the background during some of the interviews. Not so much for mood but to improve the feeling of pace in the documentary.

Also you'll need to shave 2:23 off your film for consideration in slam-dance, since the rules state it needs to be a 3-10min doc.

I hope you don't take offense to my suggestions, I just noticed most of the responses were comments more than critiques. I'm not saying that's bad, but as an editor myself, I'm always looking for ways to improve.

Good luck with your submission.

This story is amazing. Great example how a small program can make a huge difference in someone's life.
Glad this is finally getting some attention on Current.

truly amazing. shows everyone can change their life around.

nice work man! loved this piece. solid on all sides, shots, editing, music, and story. hope this one is picked up as well.

Great job Brett.

This piece really turned out well. I even watched it twice. I am sure the HD quality is much better than the current compressed flash file. The time lapses and music evoke a serious mood that is perfect to tell Pete's story.

Awesome.

Great documentary! Love the intro. Nice to see that people CAN change and overcome adversity. Well done!

This is an awesome piece.

(You need to put a better still pic. to use as a thumbnail. Right now it is a blank white still.)

Current should pick this up!

Well done. Good use of camera POV to keep the scene transitions interesting. My favorite scene is when the former rival gang members meet and talk..the conversation is all matter of fact but the body language captured by having the camera as a bystander is revealing.

I liked that the setup shots show how beautiful Ventura is with sunsets and scenery but then the streetlife shows a much poorer, grittier reality.

This is an inspirational story in that while the main subject is turning his life around, he is still working at a low pay job but that it is him and his attitude toward life has changed.

Wonderful story and character. Nicely done.

Beautifully shot and edited. Incredible story of redemption. Current should pick this up.