Keeping You Real
- added September 8, 2006
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- jasongeary
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This guy tries to act like a bigshot promoter when in fact hes just a hillbilly from Indiana. The phone keeps you real to yourself..Hope ya like it..If you dont like it Greenlight it anyway please cause WERE BROKE..:)
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- jasongeary
- 09/08/06
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wrong. so wrong.
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- Galapagogos
- 09/08/06
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Interesting concept. I like the storytelling. You can probably shave off a good 20-25 seconds and still get the point across just as well.
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- tastyyellow
- 09/09/06
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I agree with the last comment. If you start the commerical off with... "you came to the right guy" this would easily be brought down to a 30 which would make it more impactful. I would also cut up his monolouge so it's choppy. Thus it will feel like a lot of time has passed as he is relaying all of his BS to the girls without using up viewer time. BUT my subpar commericals suffer from same time disease issues. I just think that by making this one shorter it will bu much more impactful. Hot girls though. my thoughts ..... :]
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Agreed with the previous two posters. Just make it a little tighter/shorter and it will be all the better for it.
Bonus points for finding a coon skin cap in south beach. ;-)-
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- ThePrinciple
- 09/09/06
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Awesome feedback... I appreciate it. This is so much fun and i want to do many more so all the feedback will only help me. Cheers
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- jasongeary
- 09/09/06
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the guy says ummm and it is kind of distracting, but I think the 'coon hat is super funny.
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- thecerrashow
- 09/09/06
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AWESOME, boobs are so great. well done.
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Funny. But I must agree with the rest of the comments. It needs to be shorten by half. Maybe you can make it into a pod :).
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- olivia_and_sarah
- 09/14/06
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An agent with that degree of status doesn't have to back up his resume in a meeting. He should've been detected by the 1985 collar flip. If you ever meet an agent and they start bragging like that- get the fuck out of the room.
Sorry for the brutality with the other guy but it may be the only way to cleanse this site.
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Nice Job bud! A tip to help you out next time. For audio, dain down on your mic, and project your lines a little louder. Also record a little ambient nois from your location (or room tone) so that you can hide your audio cuts by blending it in over the cuts.. PEACE OUT!!! GL!
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