equalizer
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- wkelley18
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Rheahanges
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Those paper stacks are trippy, good work!
- 5 years ago
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Rheahanges
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manglade
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Start him looking bored and the papers are mixed in 1 stack. The he turns the music on his phone and we see this fast paced.
- 5 years ago
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manglade
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naisho
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I noticed you altered the ending, but it still didn't make be believe that the phone alleviated his boredom, especially when he's holding an imaginary phone, putting in an imaginary earpiece. I'm thinking a series of jump cuts that show him packing up/putting on a jacket and really happy to leave. Then I'll be convinced that he's truly done with his workday.
I'm gonna greenlight it anyway cuz the equalizer thing is cool and I do understand your concept. - 5 years ago
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naisho
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ThePrinciple
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Papers piling concept is ace. The paper changes seem a little slow to be an EQ display (Nitpicky, I know).
To me this said that a walkman phone can aleviate bordem in your day, so maybe you should show him being bored before he turns on the Walkman. Just a thought.
Overall, really cool.
- 5 years ago
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ThePrinciple
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wkelley18
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I fixed it by adding and ending with the guy totally through with his hectic day. Please re-watch and VOTE
- 5 years ago
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wkelley18
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tastyyellow
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I agree. Perhaps have a scene that will juxtapose the boredom. Otherwise, without your description, it's not easy to tell what's going on. But I do like the editing job with the papers piling, so I believe you can do a kick ass ending.
- 5 years ago
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tastyyellow
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Redbone
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I think you need to see him using the phone.
- 5 years ago
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Redbone
