Develop the story of the man in the hospital gown. - A pitch from mosessilbiger.

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Storyline submitted by atemporaryguestcalled_moses

Storyline submitted on November 22, 2010

Scene 1 Scene submitted by atemporaryguestcalled_moses Scene submitted on November 18, 2010
A person walks in the bar in hospital clothes carrying a sense of awe, relief and surprise. Options: 1) He/she is having a "near death" experience while undergoing a surgery, and reaches Bar Karma. 2) In the case of option 1, there is some Karmic connection between this person and the surgeon or nurses participating in the surgery in past lives. 3) He/she is having a "lucid dream" while in the hospital bed. 4) He/she is actually (already) dead, and reaches Bar Karma as a disembodied "soul."
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The person is a woman in her mid 60s. His name is Lucy. She slowly walks trough the bar, looking around everything with a foggy look, almost as if sleepwalking or "walking on eggs"...
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Dayna, the bartender, quickly comes into her direction, manifesting a welcoming, supporting, and cheerful attitude. She says: “Can I help you with something?” Lucy looks at her, at first with a “lost look”, and then she finally focus her attention. Lucy starts to speak frantically: “Wow, it is so bright outside!!.. The sun almost blinded me.. I started looking for my sunglasses, but had a vague memory that they might be at home..
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Then the next think I saw was a door, and I decided to open and come in..” She inquiries in an anxious tone: “Hey, what is this place?.. Is this the hospital’s restaurant, or some kind of V.I.P. room for doctors?”
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Dayna replies: “It seems you may need some rest. This is the ‘Bar Karma’. You are not in the hospital anymore.” Then she speaks with a mysterious tone: “At least, not right now…” Lucy repeats, slowly, almost as if chewing the words: “Bar Karma…?” Dayna glances at Doug and James, who have been observing the scene from afar. Dayna pauses a bit, then asks: “What’s your name?”. Lucy replies.
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Doug shouts in a joking tone: “Lucy, I one thing I guarantee you is that you are not “in the Sky with Diamonds”..! …although Dayna has a nice one in her ring! Dayna looks at him fierly and says: “Lucy, glad to meet you! I see you are wearing a hospital gawn.. Do you want me to bring something you feel more comfortable to wear?”
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Lucy looks at herself with a sense of surprise, and feels shy: “Oh my God! How embarrassing!.. Yes, please bring me something!.. What do you have?” Dayna quickly runs into a room at the back. Lucy looks around and at first she sees a picture from the Beatles album “Lucy in The Sky with Diamonds”.
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Then she sees another big picture in the wall. It is a colorful Tibetan Mandala theme, full of detailed figures within geometric shapes. She stares at it with curiosity and a sense of joy.
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Dayna finally comes back with a nice pair of black paints and a white shirt. Lucy likes her taste: “Oh, that’s wonderful, darling! It looks like my daughter’s clothes..” Dayna invites Lucy to go to the restroom and change her clothes. Lucy comes back looking really good, more self-confident and grounded. Doug and Dayna invite her to sit with themselves at a table and drink some wine.
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Doug introduces himself, Dayna and James, who waves from afar. Lucy finally sits down and starts talking: “Wow… This is all so strange..” Then she starts asking, almost like in a frantic mode: “Where did you get that Mandala picture? It looks like a picture from a meditation temple I used to go in the past.. My spiritual guide used to call it “The Wheel of Time”, and said it represents the “Cycle of Life and Death”. James shouts from afar, ironically and in an enigmatic tone: “It seems like your ‘Master’ may know what he is talking about!…”
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Lucy replies: “Do you know anything about Tibetan Buddhism?” Doug chucks: “Nope!” Lucy: “Then why your Bar is called ‘Bar Karma’”? Doug looks at James, who just waves his shoulder. Doug replies to Lucy apologetically: “Oh God, this may take too long..” Lucy starts to look very apprehensive and sweat profusely. She asks them: “Are you hearing this beep sound?”
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Suddenly Lucy leans back on her chair, and experiences a quick glimpse (like a flashback) of being still in the midst of a surgery procedure in the hospital. She listens to an annoying beep sound, which keeps buzzing into her ears until the noise becomes more intense and steady.. Somehow, she sees herself observing the scene from above the operation bed, and something makes draws her eyes into the surgeon. Her perception moves back and forth from above the bed, and from the bes, looking at the faces of the doctor and nurses. Then, a weird recognition comes to her mind. Strangely, the doctor looks a little bit like Doug, from the Bar..
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In a flash, Lucy sees herself in the bar again, looking confused at Doug. The beep sound is still in the background, but faded. Dayna gives her a compassionate look and a brief hug. Lucy seems distressed. She says: “Oh my God, I am in the middle of my surgery! And now I am here!!??” James come closer to the table and says in a comforting tone: “That’s life, sweetie.. We all live in many parallel realties..And it is up to us to chose which one to take..” Lucy seems to not take him too seriously, and have quick inside visions about some books and movies running through her minds' eyes.. She keeps asking lots of questions in a dazzled, nervous tone: “Where I am? Am I dying? Am I dead? Is this the “Bardo”, or is all of this just one of my weird “lucid dreams”?
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Doug says: “Now you are the one making me confused! First of all, what is this “Bardo” about? James, who is now sharing the table with the other three, gives a smirky smile.. He comments: “I remember hearing about this stuff in some of my “past lives”, but have not heard much about it for a long, long time..” Dayna seems a bit perplexed, but quite curious. Lucy replies: “Bardo is the “place” or “transition time’ between lives, according to the Tibetan Buddhist tradition. There is even a classic book written about it, called by the “Tibetan Book of the Dead”, which is supposed to bring some guidance and support to people who are recently deceased or dying to go through this “transition”. I especially resonate with a Western version called “The American Book of the Dead”. I got this book recently and loved it!” And then she curves with a sad face: “ I just feel a bit sad that I could not help my husband when he died some years ago… Anyway, you all may think I am crazy, right? – just by seeing these weird “looks” in your faces!” Everybody but James seemed intrigued and curious. He had a special smile and shiny blink in his eyes…
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Suddenly, Dayna points into the TV in the Bar in a frantic way: The News is showing a concerned reporter giving some “breaking news” from a hospital in San Francisco, California. He says: “…although there is still a lot of secrecy around the circumstances of her internation, the doctors said that probably the actress has now a 50/50 chance of survival…” A recent photo from Lucy is then shown in the screen, together with the US President during a charity event. Lucy stares at the TV, in state of shock. She says: “Yes, I might be really dreaming!” Doug comments: “Speaking about ‘dreaming’, what did you mean by ‘weird lucid dreams’? James smiles again, as if hiding something, waiting for the others to ask... Lucy, still disturbed by the news, says (coming from a certain “professorial” or reverential tone and attitude): “Lucid Dreaming is an ancient shamanic practice common in the Bon Tibetan Buddhism, a shamanic branch of this tradition. You basically “know” that you are dreaming, while you are dreaming, and things are as bright (or brighter) than in “real life”. They also believe that the practice of "lucid dreaming" can be also seen as some kind of training or preparation for a liberation from the “Bardo”, which as I said, is believed as being the period “in between” lives - and that both "Karma", knowledge and experience with that state will dictate the nature of its experiences and outcomes..
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Doug and Dayna look at each other, with a curious but skeptical look at their faces. James giggles. Lucy sighs. Dayna asks Lucy: “So... are you an actress?” “Yes! You never heard about me?” - Lucy replies. Dayna says” No, sorry… You know, we have many channels going on here in our TV, and I also work full time, so it’s hard to keep up!” Lucy starts to feel strange again, and to breath heavily. She complains that her heart is beating quicker and harder… In the meantime, at the operation table, the doctor (who really looks like Doug, but not exactly. Perhaps he is Doug’s brother - or a twin brother?) whispers in a very quite tone to one of his young nurses: “I am glad we got her back, but the instruments still show that her state is quite unstable..” The nurse replies, with an emotional tone: “Yes, that was a miracle doc! She was basically gone, and then… bum! She is back again!” Back at the bar table, Lucy starts to do “strange” repetitive movements with her eyes and arms, and to make different sounds and breath exercises. Everybody at the table looks intrigued at her. She comments, in a joking tone: “Sorry! I was just checking if this is really a ‘lucid dream’, but strangely enough, it doesn’t seem to be!” OK, OK, I think I know! I maybe either having a “near death experience” while they are operating me, or..” - then looks down and sighs in a depressing tone - ”…or I may be dead!?…” She looks up again to Dayna, Doug and James again. You definitely look like ghosts staring at me like that!” She jokes in a lighter (but still a bit nervous) tone, and her eyes shine a little bit. Lucy continues: “Now, enough about me and my ideas! Tell me more about you, and this whole ‘Bar Karma’ is about?”
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James takes the lead, and gives Lucy more details about “Bar Karma”. He then gives the word to Doug, who complements his explanation. They tell Lucy her situation is a bit different from others, and that they too are a bit confused. Dayna touches Lucy’s hand on the table in a loving ands comforting way. Lucy is thankful for the clarifications, although she does not seem too happy. Doug comments: “Do you live in San Francisco? I have a brother that lives there. He is a neurosurgeon”. Lucy drops her cup of wine on the table! “What??” – she says. “What is his name?”