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Pitch an idea for an episode Posted by Jim_Goldblum | OCTOBER 29, 2010

JoseCanseko
JoseCanseko
2 years ago |
Doug is still trying to figure out what is going on with the bar. He finds a door that leads somewhere new, its dark down a hallway there is a faint blue glow from a screen or a light or something else, Doug isn't sure. He looks back outside and sees Dayna talking to James as the bar door opens, he decides to leave it for now. In through the door comes a beautiful woman dressed in gold, black and red.

She walks very calmly to the bar eying James for a bit, Dayna for longer James fixes her a fancy drink and thinks he knows her from a long time ago but can't place his finger on it. She then looks at Doug. Doug can feel the intensity from her stare as he stands near the back, like he can't move. Picking up her drink, she walks over to him and paces around him three times. Doug asking her questions with charm and flirtatiousness first pace. Nothing out of her but a slight eyebrow raise. Pace around 2 he is panicked, why can't he move, who is she? Pace around 3 he starts getting angry and she interrupts him with "enough." and his mouth shuts on queue. She has come to see the new owner of the bar, she starts talking about the last owner and how he had some unusual talents and skills and how Doug doesn't have any, yet. She starts picking apart his bad qualities, or insecurities, or wrong doings in his life, and how he isn't qualified for the job. There is no possible way he could have won the deed.

Dayna, not fully knowing Doug tries to defend him, while James is still transfixed on how he knows her. She stops picking on Doug and starts on Dayna, how she chose to get a job here to escape everything else etc. James finally remembers where he knows her from and calls her out as the original owner. The woman smiles and turns to James who now cannot move or speak. Doug being released from her gaze starts asking her all the questions about the bar, how she came to be the owner, how to make his life better, fix everything.

The door opens and a customer walks in, a beggar from the 1900's walks in with some coin he had received on the streets. The woman has disappeared and is nowhere to be found. The man spills his troubles to James and Doug over a pint, how he can't hold a steady job and how he likes a girl. Dayna gives as much advice as she can on the girl, while Doug and James help him with advices on jobs, with Doug giving shortcuts. After a pint on the house, the beggar leaves and suddenly the woman returns. she congratulates him for his efforts and shows him on a screen how his advice panned out for the beggar. The beggar gets a job, starts failing, remembers Doug's shortcuts for the simple work (Doug really just using current level of technology thinking) and starts doing exceptionally well. She fast forwards in time and he gets the girl, although the girl wasn't exactly what he thought. Dayna realizing that they never asked about her, and how the beggar described he liked how she looked.

"A worthy effort, I will visit again" A small faint white light emanates from her fingertips and a white marble materializes to no ones view but the audience. She drops the marble, no one noticing it fall. She leaves and the three are speechless. We watch as the marble falls perfectly into a hiding place as it glows a faint blue similar to the end of the hallway Doug saw earlier.

3 comments // Pitch an idea for an episode - a pitch from JoseCanseko

  • the1truesushiboy
  • albieh
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      albieh  
    • yes, lots of good thinking that could relate to our overall mythology - feels like too much story for one half hour though - the marble though - gotta figure that out!

    • 2 years ago
  • Bruden
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      Bruden  
    • I like it, a good idea of an overarching storyline to build on, over the course of the season or a couple of them it could expand on who she is and how the bar came to be, and how it all relates to the current staff of Bar Karma.

    • 2 years ago